this edit is definitely more in-line with the project objectives. it makes good sense overall, and the speed changes, camera angles, and p.o.v.s are all quite interesting. the two best moments are when the red word "print" keeps repeatedly receding in space, signifying that you are making multiple prints. then the other moment is when the multiple "print"s get put into the "package" type and that type is put together. very nice there.
the juxtaposition of the digital screen with the analog letterpress is interesting, but its meaning is not well resolved. i don't understand why there are digital screen elements intertwined in the letterpress process, because i don't see them show up anywhere in that letterpress process. it seems like you're trying to comment on a mix of technologies, but you don't make enough use of the screen to say anything specific about it.
the other issue i have is that you telegraph or give away the meaning of two of your verbs by putting the verb on the screen -- you tell us directly what you're trying to communicate ("stack" and "package"), rather than making the noun do the work for you by moving around the screen.
thanks for the input tyler, that actually helps a lot. I just kinda tried to push what we talked about as much as I could in a short amount of time for feedback, so I guess I'm set. I hope I don't annoy you with all of my interaction and somewhat intrusive questioning and or interjections.
I think you are a great teacher among many great teachers. To each there own teaching. I can't help but notice that you and Jamie are similar in that you simply don't know how to deal with certain antics and behaviors such as my own. I feel bad but hope that I come off as some sort of entertainment. I think that you teachers deserve the kids that work hard, participate and also value what you have to say.
this edit is definitely more in-line with the project objectives. it makes good sense overall, and the speed changes, camera angles, and p.o.v.s are all quite interesting. the two best moments are when the red word "print" keeps repeatedly receding in space, signifying that you are making multiple prints. then the other moment is when the multiple "print"s get put into the "package" type and that type is put together. very nice there.
ReplyDeletethe juxtaposition of the digital screen with the analog letterpress is interesting, but its meaning is not well resolved. i don't understand why there are digital screen elements intertwined in the letterpress process, because i don't see them show up anywhere in that letterpress process. it seems like you're trying to comment on a mix of technologies, but you don't make enough use of the screen to say anything specific about it.
the other issue i have is that you telegraph or give away the meaning of two of your verbs by putting the verb on the screen -- you tell us directly what you're trying to communicate ("stack" and "package"), rather than making the noun do the work for you by moving around the screen.
thanks for the input tyler, that actually helps a lot. I just kinda tried to push what we talked about as much as I could in a short amount of time for feedback, so I guess I'm set. I hope I don't annoy you with all of my interaction and somewhat intrusive questioning and or interjections.
ReplyDeleteI think you are a great teacher among many great teachers. To each there own teaching. I can't help but notice that you and Jamie are similar in that you simply don't know how to deal with certain antics and behaviors such as my own. I feel bad but hope that I come off as some sort of entertainment. I think that you teachers deserve the kids that work hard, participate and also value what you have to say.
Basically, I hope to pick your brains.